I've been writing stories and poems for a while now, and i'd like to know what you think of this one. most of my poetry is lighthearted, kind of like a children's book. (I want to write a kid's book someday)
be brutal
The sky is blue, trees are green, this is what we know
and lots of fruits and veggies are needed for us to grow
i thought as i colored the kitty's fur an ugly gray
"why not bring variety into the dullness of the day?"
there are so many colors in my Crayola Crayon box
why be so restricted to the shades of dirt and rocks?
i finished one gray kitty, and started another anew
by picking out a crayon named Outer Space Blue
and soon that cat had fuchsia stripes and periwinkle spots
and a hat with sea foam daisies and scarlet polka dots
i looked down at my masterpiece, my beloved work of art
it defied the laws of coloring, followed the rules of my heart
i wasn't just a simple color-by-numbers fool
'cause today i took a stand and colored outside of the rules
What do you think of my poem?
I love it...I read it to my 4 year old and he loved it too :)
Reply:ok yes, for a four year old...wildly entertaining.
Reply:I like this. It's cute and quite suitable for children. It can even help little kids with learning. I can already see the illustrations that would accompany this. Bravo, a very well done writing job here.
Reply:i actually lik3 it
keep writin':D
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Sunday, January 22, 2012
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